soncnica: (The Hunt)
soncnica ([personal profile] soncnica) wrote2011-02-27 09:12 pm

The Hunt 1/?

Title: The Hunt 1/?
Author: soncnica
Rating: 'NC-17' later, but 'PG-13' for now
Genre/pairing: Jared/Jensen AU
Characters: Jared, Jensen
Word count: cca. 2.900 this chapter
Summary: It's the time of The Hunt again. And this year Jensen has to participate. Jared is a werewolf who hasn't found his mate yet in all the years he's been participating in The Hunt. But this year... he smells something he wants.
Warnings: Okay, so... werewolfish!Jared, bloodplay, branding, barebacking, biting, mental links, chuffing/presten, scenting, skitish!Jensen (but not too much, he is a man afterall), language, age difference (Jared is 28, Jensen is 18), NO CHARACTER DEATH, NOT UNDERAGE and a lot more warnings to come. I'll post warnings with chapters, so THIS CHAPTER: no warnings.
Disclaimer: I seriously only own the grammar/spelling mistakes. Everything else is not mine! NOT MINE! ALL IS FICTION!
A/N: Writen for this prompt at spn_hardcore animalistic behavior meme.

You know how you build a house, right? Well this story is kinda like building a house. You start with the foundations, then you move on up... you can't have the roof if you don't have a basement. Erm, well that is my way of apologizing to everyone who wanna read were!Jared erm doing stuff to Jensen ASAP... :) Umm, I think that a good build up to some more juicy parts make those juicy parts more.. juicy!? Or not?! :) 
Anywho... erm... yes, I'll post warnings to chapters, so yeah umm please check the warnings BEFORE you read the chapter!!!

Enjoy...



Jensen was seven years old when he was starting to catch glimpses of something being really, really very wrong in the village, especially when summer was coming, but it wasn't because they had to cut all that grass or do work in the fields or anything like that… no, it wasn't that. Everyone was used to working hard, especially in the summer so… it wasn't that.

And he wasn't stupid even if everyone kept telling him that there's nothing wrong, nothing happening and that he should go back to play in the hay and leave the grown ups to grown up matters.

But he could hear crying coming from cottages in those hot summer nights, when the cottage doors were often open to let the air in and let the animals out … sobs and whispers made with brave voices: 'it's going to be alright, momma' and sobbing of: 'baby, my baby' as a reply. And the looks some women wore during the day and how boys that were just coming of age would wear grim looks and be either snappy or rude to him or just ignore him completely… all that made him think that there was something very, very wrong.

And boys were disappearing… when they went through the coming of age ritual, which he was not allowed to attend until he was eighteen and so he had no idea what went on there, but he could hear screaming and crying and shouting while he tried to burry his head into the goose-feather filled pillow. His mother often had to pry his fingers from the pillow and take him into her lap, where he clutched at her skirt, shaking all over and crying.

"Shhh, baby. It's alright," she said, stroking his sweat soaked hair, "it's going to be alright."

But the screaming and the crying coming from the clearing by the forest where the ritual was taking place every year still made him shake and grab his mother's skirt tighter.

When he was eight, Aidan's brother disappeared and he was never seen again but Mikan's brother was still around, which didn't make any sense, because they both went through the ritual and… yeah, he just couldn't figure it out, but Mikan told him that her brother isn't what he used to be.

"He's grown up, he doesn't want to play with me no more." She pouted while hitting the floor with a stick sending dust to fly all around them.

Jensen just nodded at that and thought his own thoughts.

When he was nine, Lokas' and Molar's brothers disappeared too but Peiker's and Zishas' brothers were still in the village; they came back after missing for three days; came back all dirty and without clothes, stumbling naked to the centre of the village where they collapsed to the ground. Jensen could see scratches all over their bodies, blood and dirt, before his mother put her hand over his eyes and took him into the cottage. And Peiker told him later that her brother has a long scar on his leg; she told him it's gross and that she can't look at it.

Nothing made any sense to him anymore and when he asked his mother about it, she told him that the boys, who went missing, didn't go missing but they had been sick, very sick and died.

"Jensen, they were sick, sweetie," she told him while she was reaping grain, "they died. There was nothing the Elders could do about it and they died. You know what that means, right?"

"Yes, mother, I know."

He hung his head and thought about death and how that's nothing to be scared of because when he'll die, he'll go up to the sky, up to sit on the moon with his father, up to the Gods who will take care of him... or at least that's what the Elders tell him.

"But what about the ones that came back?"

"Jensen, enough."

"Yes, mother."

The boys died. And that was that. He lived with that thought until he was ending his twelfth year, going on thirteen and becoming a najst, because no matter how hard he tried, asked questions, and once even tried to sneak out to see the ritual - and was caught by Mikan's father who beat the living shit out of him for disobeying the village rules - to see what all that screaming was about… he found no answers, he just found his ass hurting and stinging for a week after Mikan's father's hand was done with it. There was nothing but – they died. He tried talking to the ones who came back, but they were mostly silent or told him that he's not old enough to know.

And then four months into his thirteenth year, four months since he became a najst … his world turned upside down, crashed all around him and all he could see were pieces of a time when he was innocently wrapped in ignorance. And he wanted that back.

 He woke up at dawn feeling the heat of the day already on his skin with the sun shining directly in his eye and a chicken poking him in the leg.

He kicked the chicken away, earning himself a bgoook, bgoook while it ran away, probably in search for some more food, because if it was Lara.. that chicken will one day eat the whole house.

He smiled, poked himself in the eye, because he wasn't really well coordinated in the early mornings and got up from the huge pile of hay that was his bed.

He had an important day ahead and he needed to go tend to the animals, before everything else.

"Jensen?"

His mother's sleepy voice startled him; he didn't expect her to be up already, it was only dawn and she needed her rest, because she wasn't getting any younger. She was only getting closer to her death.

He turned around while putting on his shirt that smelled like manure, his eyes watering a little from the smell, but it was his work shirt… he only had two shirts… no need to ruin his good one.

"Mother."

He watched her get up from her cot, old bones cracking and shifting and he saw the pained expression on her face when she tried to stand up straight, but couldn't. Not fully. She walked up to him, and all he could see was the beautiful women from years ago, his mother who protected him, held him in her lap and rocked him to sleep when life got to hard for them both. Her hand was gentle then, colored brown from the sun, warm and so soft… but now it was wrinkled, calloused, hardened by years and years of hard work, dirt behind her bitten fingernails… but when it landed on his cheek, it was still gentle, still soft.

"You okay, baby?"

He closed his eyes, imagining how this same scene happened years back, when he wasn't taller then his mother and when she didn't have to stand up on the tips of her toes to reach his cheek.

"'m fine."

He whispered and leaned into the touch before it was gone, savoring the feel of his mother's palm, rough and wrinkled, on his cheek. He opened his eyes to see her wiping her hands in her dirty apron and turning around to go sit back on her bed.

"Alright," she sighed, "the Elders will be expecting you at noon, don't be late and wash yourself before going. Don't want you smelling like a pig, alright?"

He smiled. His mother may be old, but she is still a mother.

"Yes, ma'am."

That earned him a smile and he didn't stay long enough to see the smile be toothless and sad.

The cows gave a lot of milk, the goats too and they will have to slaughter two sheep because they were getting too old to still have them around.

He kept himself busy in the barn; they had two cows and two goats and five sheep but they shared all that with Mikan's family so he'll have to give them half of everything he gathered. He sighed and picked up five eggs while whispering to Lara that his leg is not breakfast.

"Mikan, mornin'."

"Jensen."

"I brought you milk and eggs. There were five eggs, I'll give you three. I won't have breakfast and my mom'll be happy with two."

"You're babbling."

He rubbed the back of his head and smiled awkwardly at his friend.

"You nervous?"

"I'm…," he looked into his friend's eyes, "no, no I'm not." May Gods strike him with a lightning if he'll ever admit to a girl that he's scared. No way.

"You probably should be."

With that she took the basket from his hands and went inside her cottage. He could hear her mother say in a tumble of words: "That poor boy, the werewolves are gonna get him, Mikan, they'll breed him, make him one of them, bite him, bleed him, Mikan', they'll eat him alive."

He could feel a chill go down his spine at those words.

"Momma, you're talking nonsense. There're no such things as werewolves. Now, I'll make you some breakfast, Jensen brought eggs and milk. Go to the table."

With Mikan's words in his head he left for his cottage to wash up and make his mother some breakfast. There are no such things as werewolves, Mikan's mother doesn't know what's she talking about, she's insane anyways, has been ever since her son came back and her husband died. The end.

But…

But… what if she's right?

He was lying on the grass with his back leaned to the trunk of a huge, old oak with a sorrel in his mouth, sucking the sour juice out if it and looking up at the blue sky, watching the sun to see what time it is. He has half an hour to go before he has to get to the Elders and he's silently freaking out. His stomach is in knots, his hands are shaking and his vision is going in and out of focus, the clouds moving so fast on the blue sky.

He has no idea what will happen. No one wanted to tell him anything. He asked his mother and she had no answers, and all of his friends are either too young to ask or the same age as him and well, they know nothing too. And he wanted to ask Mikan's brother about what happened to him and all he got was a blank stare and "I have to go clean the stables, Jensen." which was not helpful at all. He asked others too, other boys who came back, but they all gave him a smile, some sad some awkward, and send him on his way. He asked Peiker's brother what will happen when he'll get to the Elders, but he just shrugged and told him: "You'll see. You don't have to be scared, though. It's gonna be okay."

They were all acting a little too suspicious for his liking; they always had. The boys – those who came back from wherever they went, and those who were in najst already - always chatted in groups and when he or his friends came close, they stopped and went their separate ways. And he sometimes yelled after them to talk to him, tell him what is so important that he can't be included, they told him: "You're too young, you're not a najst yet."

Maybe today… maybe today he'll find out what they were all talking about. Maybe today – now that he's a najst – he'll be able to join their 'secret society'. Maybe, maybe they're talking about girls. Maybe he'll find out more about girls, which kinda grosses him out, because girls with their girl cooties. Yuck.

But he is a najst now… so maybe talking about girls is what najst's do.

Maybe.

He sighed and wiggled a little on the hard floor; the soil beneath him was warm from the sun, the grass around him tall, hiding him from everyone, the tree trunk hard on his back.

He was in his favorite corner of the meadow that stretched behind the cottages; a meadow that was surrounded by a forest that he never dared to enter. Once, when he was seven or eight, a lamb escaped him and went into the forest and before he could think about it, he ran after it. He can't remember much about that day, only flashes of brown-blue-green-yellow-orange eyes, brown hair and a voice telling him to just close his eyes. He did… he didn't want too but the voice was as soft as a lullaby and his eyes closed without him even doing anything.

When he opened them, his mother was hovering above him with a look that told him he was in huge, huge trouble.

He rose up so fast he almost broke his neck. Those eyes that were changing color every few seconds, brown hair, a voice ordering him…

"Gods!"

He hadn't thought about that day in years, he hadn't even… what happened to him then? Was it someone from the village coming to save him? There were a lot of men with brown hair and eyes in the village. Maybe it was one of them. It had to be one of them.

It was probably one of them.

But no man's eyes can change color like that. No man's.

"Jensen, Aidan, Lokas, Molar, Zishas, welcome."

They had all be standing before the Elder's cottage, nervously shifting around, sweaty palms shaking and fear in their stomachs. They were friends, had been ever since they could crawl all becoming najst's this year and they will go through this together.

Elder Zehas' voice startled them, made them shield their eyes from the noon sun when they looked up and saw the man standing there before them… he was a tall man, old, piercing blue eyes and gray hair, with a long pink scar going from the side of his neck to his left eye.

"Come in, boys. Come in."

He was a nice man, dressed in a white robe, with a green belt and a necklace full off teeth around his neck… the teeth rattled when he walked and it made Jensen nervous when he walked behind him into the dark interior of the cottage.

"Sit, sit." The Elder raised his arm, the bracelets around his wrists making noise when he moved his arm.

There were animal skins on the floor, some hay, some hand made carpets that women made from wool in long, cold winter nights. It smelled of some kinda… if Jensen didn't know better, he'd say it smelled like roses. Or that honeysuckle bush he always goes to hide behind when they're playing hide-and-seek. It smells too heavy for him and he hopes that they won't have to stay for long, because he might just pass out.

He wishes someone would open a window when he sits down on the floor, on a red carpet that felt cool to the touch. Aidan sat down next to him and Jensen could feel the boy's nervousness coming from him in waves that hit Jensen all over his body. They were all scared. Terrified. And those heavy smells of roses and honeysuckle were making his head hurt and his eyes water.

He doesn't know if he'll be able to do this… sit here and listen… he feels… a bit… out of it. Like the cottage walls are swimming in and out of focus, like they're fluid.

He sits with his legs to his chest and arms wrapped around his shins, blinking away the smells and the hot air, ignoring the nausea forming in his stomach.

He's not a sissy… he won't puke.

He watched Zehas as he sat down by the door, completing the small circle they made, completely blocking the only way out. Jensen wondered where all the rest of the Elders were, but he didn't dare to ask. This was the Elder… you do not speak without being asked.

"You are all a najst now," Zehas' voice was deep and soothing, rocking Jensen almost to sleep, "soon to become men, only five more summers to go and today is the day you will get to know the village's life. Today is the day when you will be allowed to talk to the other men, participate in their conversations, drink with them, laugh with them and share their pain with them… pain and joy, sadness and secrets."

And with those words Jensen remembered all that screaming and crying and yelling and shouting and begging and pleading that had always happened on the twenty-second of June.

TBC…P.S: if you find Jared in this chapter, I'll give you a cookie *grins*

CHAPTER 2

[identity profile] anifsemaj.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 05:12 pm (UTC)(link)
hee this looks awesome! I'm looking forward to more (and I want my cookie :P)

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 05:17 pm (UTC)(link)
more will be soon, thank you!!!! ... I just have to decide if I wanna have the next chapter be Jensen's or Jared's... it's a bit tricky... :)

eee you found Jared in this chapter!? *gives you a cookie* they're with chocolate, I just took them out of the oven so watch your fingers! :)

THANK YOU so much for reading!!!!

S.
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[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 05:19 pm (UTC)(link)
*gives you a cookie* they're still hot, so watch your fingers! :)

the changing eye color has a meaning, but we'll get to that a bit later :)))

thank you sooo much for reading and more will come soon!!!! :)))

thank you!!!

S.

[identity profile] framedhim.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 05:19 pm (UTC)(link)
The flow of this story is breath-taking. Liquid, smooth and it simply takes flight. Fantastic descriptions that pull a reader in, and I for one am enjoying this immensely. Can't say enough good things on what you have here, the background build-up is perfect.

Thank you for sharing.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 05:30 pm (UTC)(link)
*hugs you* thank you.. so much! I was scared about the flow of the story and NOW... now I'm not scared anymore.. thank you! *smishes you*
thank you so much!!!! I'll try to keep this up... I don't wanna disappoint anyone with bad flow and bad descriptions or anything. So... thank you soo soo much! :)

I was afraid that the build-up will be boring, you know!? but for this story to work, it just has to be there, right!?
*hugs*
thank you!

hope to see you next chapter too! :)

S.



[identity profile] deansgirl7107.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 05:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Very interesting story,intrigue and scary.

Cant wait to read more,cause i want to know what`s the big secret in the village.

Looking forward to read more
Please update soon.

P.S.Is this Jared? Did i win the cookie?*look hopeful*
*Those eyes that were changing color every few seconds, brown hair, a voice ordering him…*

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 05:32 pm (UTC)(link)
*squee* thank you! :)
scary!? yes, I would be scared to live in that village.. I would be scared out of my mind and I would wanna run away from it ASAP!

I'll update soon, I promise :)

*gives you a cookie* they are not as hot as they were a few minutes ago, so... bite in.. they're with chocolate! :)

thank you!!!

S.

Hell yes!

[identity profile] nanoks.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 06:00 pm (UTC)(link)
More!! Baby more!! Please update! I am loving your story! *hugs you so hard your ears pop*

Re: Hell yes!

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 06:30 pm (UTC)(link)
there will be MORE!!! there will be!!!! I swear!
thank you!

ouch... my ears!!!!!! now how will I write with this pain in my head!? :P

*hugs you*

S.

[identity profile] somer.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 06:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Yes, I´m in. I´ll definitively follow this story. Absolute great and intriguing start.

CAN´T WAIT FOR MORE!! :)

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 06:31 pm (UTC)(link)
WHOOOOOOT! *hugs you* awesome, thank you!!!
'm sooooooo happy!!!!

I'll post more soon :))

thank you!!!!

S.

[identity profile] gypsy-atavari.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 06:43 pm (UTC)(link)
Oooh I like good build ups - makes for a more satisfying story methinks - so I'm quite happy for you to tell us all the back story first. :-)

Looking forward to the next chapter - it's off to a great start! :-)

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 06:50 pm (UTC)(link)
me too, me too!!!! it's like.. a good build up makes everything more... more... exciting and yummy in the end! :) so yeah.. I decided to do a build up, to go back, write a bit about the history and how everything came to be :) 'm so happy you like it too! :) thank you!

I'll update soon... :) hope to see you then! :)

thank you so much for reading!

S.

[identity profile] eternal-moonie.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 07:22 pm (UTC)(link)
Absolutely AWESOME start!!

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 07:25 pm (UTC)(link)
*hugs you* thank you so much! :))))) I hope that whatever comes next won't disappoint :) *bites lip*

thank you!!!!

S.

[identity profile] vambrace.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 08:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Great!! I found Jared---changeable eyes man.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 08:07 pm (UTC)(link)
changeable eyes FTW!!!! :)))
*gives you a cookie*

LOL

S.

[identity profile] seruya.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 08:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Great opening. I love it.
I even found Jared. The changing eye color guy, right? I really wanna know what that's all about. *intrigued*

Love your writing style and can't wait to read more.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 08:19 pm (UTC)(link)
thank you! :) *squee*
*gives you a cookie* they're with chocolate :)
and yeah the eye changing thing will be addressed later in the story and I'm sooo glad you're intrigued by that *giggles* :))) thank you!!!!

and I will try to keep the writing style like this, but I think that I'll change it a little when I do Jared's backstory.. umm.. yeah :) thank you!!!!!

S.

[identity profile] serendip50.livejournal.com 2011-02-28 11:06 pm (UTC)(link)
I was captivated by your awesome description of the village the rituals and secrets and lies that confound, scare and intrigue Jensen as he is growing.

If I didn't know about the werewolves (and I realise they were also mentioned in this chapter) I would be completely baffled myself...:). Nicely done.

Great introduction.

An interesting and imaginative selection of names you have chosen in this fiction are they originated from anywhere specific?...And, how do you pronounce najst anyway...lol. xx

PS When you stated at the end of this chapter if we could find Jared in this chapter we could have a cookie (virtual of course...haha)...(he of course was the multi eye coloured creature in the forest) I initially thought you were being sarcastic because of the lack of Jared in this chapter....lol.




[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:31 pm (UTC)(link)
*hugs you* you are!? captivated!? thank you so much! I.. I.. I was afraid that it would be boring to the readers, but I guess I was wrong... I mean sometimes people just wanna get to the good parts ('m guilty of that too, LOL)and kinda forget that the good parts have to have a backstory too, ya know!? *sniffles* so thank you! :)) for not getting bored! :))

and yeah there are secrets but only until the kids mature enough to hear them, to understand them... umm, we'll get to that in the next chapter and things will be clearer then, I HOPE :)

umm the names!? I have no clue where those came from... I was thinking about HOW to name people, because I didn't want the story to have the usual suspects (Chad, Steve, Chris, Gen, Sandy, Danni.. ya know?) so I tried to do something different and the names have to sound a bit.. archaic maybe?! :)
and ummm najst it's umm... like... in English you have ELEVEN, TWELVE, THIRteen, right!? the word -teen, apears in the years at thirteen..
and in Slovene (my mother tongue) the years go.. enaJST, dvaNAJST, triNAJST... so najst is like TEEN in English... 'm probably making NO sense :)LOL
idk how you'd pronaunciate it in english, 'm not that good with phonetics... hmmm... *scratches head*

LOL :))) hahah, I just wanted people to REALLY read the story... ya know!? because I always leave clues about things to come in every paragraph or at least in every chapter and I didn't want the readers to miss anything that could be relevant for chapters to come :)
and yup.. Jared is the one who's changing the color of his eyes :)) *gives you a cookie* see, THAT is a clue! :) that means that Jared has met Jensen before! *winks*

THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH for this amazing amazing comment!

*hugs*
S.

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[identity profile] randomflamingo.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:46 am (UTC)(link)
Wonderful beginning! I did find Jared but you have the cookie. You deserve it for this great fic!

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:15 pm (UTC)(link)
thank you!!! 'm so glad you think so! :)))))
ohhh nooo, you found Jared so you deserve a cookie, I baked plenty of them so.. *gives you a cookie* they're chocolate! mmmhm

thank you so much!!!!

S.

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[identity profile] ladydey.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 01:59 am (UTC)(link)
It's my policy to de-anon myself as the prompter when a writer!nonnie who fills one of my prompts does so - so *waves* hi, this was originally one of my hardcore prompts. Another reason that I wanted to de-cloak myself was that I really love what you are doing with my prompt.

I can only echo what I said earlier in response to the snippet that you posted - I love that world building that you are doing; I LOVE that Jensen is curious and not content to just take what people say as true; I love that it's Jensen's mother who tells him that the Hunt equals death, she's probably the only person who could scare him so fully in the future; I kind of love that the village isn't really dealing well with the necessary outcomes of the Hunt (people joining the were pack and not coming back); and I LOVE that Jared and Jensen have met before, and Jared took care of Jensen [that is another one of my favorite tropes, so thanks].

I can't wait to find out what returning to the village after the Hunt means - because from Jensen's point of view it looks that the people who come back are not, lets call it unused. I look forward to Jared's point of view and learning the history of the Hunt.

In short, I am really excited to see where you take my prompt, so far I've been nothing but happy with what you have shared. Thanks.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:41 pm (UTC)(link)
HEY! **waves** 's good to finally meet you! :)))
and you could have commented anon if you wanted, it's okay... I think I have that enabled *scratches head*
yeah, heh, I have no problems with writing anything with my own penname... idk, I just don't care really... but I COMPLETELY understand why people do things anonimously... so you de-anoning yourself is really really awesome and brave!!!! thank you :)))

THANK YOU SO MUCH! this is your prompt and I am trying my best to follow it, and I know that YOUR vision of this and MINE will be kinda different, but I'm still hoping and praying that you will like it... because it is YOUR idea, 'm just gonna try my best to do it good and to not disappoint you! :))))) and really if there will be anything that you won't like, just please tell me, okay?! criticism is always welcome! :)

ummm, *coughs* yeah you said in your prompt that you wanted skitish!Jensen and I'm trying to do it like that, but.. I kinda want him to be brave, to not take the crap that is given to him.. but he is also scared and he has every right to be like that.. :) right!? :)))

awesome!!!I AM SOOOO GLAD that you told me that you like Jared taking care of Jensen, because there will be MORE of that in the future... *phew* thank you for that... teehee, I kinda like that too... Jared taking care of Jensen... *nods* yesss, I do.. so there will be plenty of that in the future... erm, mainly because.. Jared as a wolf is really really rough and Jared as a man is really really gentle, so... *wink, wink*

anywho... mhm, yes.. the people who come back... well... I don't wanna say too much... but they are not... unused yes.. they are.. very very much used! *coughs*

THANK YOU SOOO MUCH!! *drawls little hearts around the comment* thank you!!!!!

hope to hear from you in the next chapter too. :))))

S.

[identity profile] ktrisha.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 02:37 am (UTC)(link)
I want a cookie. I want a cookie.

It was the changing eye color guy.. :)


Cookie cookie.

I am intrigued.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:14 pm (UTC)(link)
LOL :))))

ahhahah *gives you a cookie* they're chocolate :)

LOL :)))

thank you!!!!!!!!!!

S.

[identity profile] makgambit.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 03:49 am (UTC)(link)
This is fantastic so far.
So why do his eyes change, emotions?finding his mate? and why so many different colors? How come they only send out the boys for sacrifice? And just what are the age diffeances? I really hope you update this fic quickly cause I'm loving it and its just giving me lots of questions.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:13 pm (UTC)(link)
whooot, awesome! thank you!!!!

uff so many questions that I can not and will not answer... *evil grin* I wanna answer, but that would take all the magic out of the story, ya know!? *winks*

but all that will be answered in later chapters :)))
I will update very soon, I promise :)

thank you sooo much!

S.

[identity profile] phillydogg.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 04:22 am (UTC)(link)
This is really intriguing! You've really begun building a fascinating world here, and I can't wait to read more.

Its beautifully written and I eagerly await more!

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:11 pm (UTC)(link)
thank you! :)) *squee* I was scared that this whole building the world thingy will be boring to some, but I guess I was wrong... but like I said a good build up to more juicy parts does make those juicy parts more juicy :) right!? *winks*

thank you!!! I'm so happy you like this :)))))

hope to see you next chapter :)))

S.

[identity profile] antarshakes.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 05:03 am (UTC)(link)
omg hurry!! I WANT MOAR!!

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:09 pm (UTC)(link)
THEN I SHALL GIVE YOU MOAR!!! *grins* soon, I promise :)

THANK YOU for reading!!!!!

S.

[identity profile] aubergineautumn.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 07:22 am (UTC)(link)
Awesome fill! This feels like The Village, a little.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:09 pm (UTC)(link)
OMG I LOVE THAT MOVIE!!! and yeah, I do admit that it does feel like The Village, a little, maybe because I seriously ADORE that movie and maybe I just can't NOT put some elements of it in this story... *sigh* maybe I shouldn't have watched it so many times *sigh*

THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!

S.

[identity profile] xwacky.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 08:34 am (UTC)(link)
Interesting start. Can't wait for more! <3

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:07 pm (UTC)(link)
heee thank you! :))))

there will be more... soon, I promise! :)))

S.

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 12:32 pm (UTC)(link)
*squee* thank you!!!

hugs
S.

[identity profile] wataru-kisugi.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 02:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Great start! Can't wait for the next chapter!!

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 03:28 pm (UTC)(link)
hey!
thank you!! :)))

there will be more soon!!!!!!! :)))))

S.

[identity profile] lycaness.livejournal.com 2011-03-01 10:30 pm (UTC)(link)
Ooh, this looks so interesting, I can't wait to read more. I usually wait for stories to be finished before I read them, because I just get to impatient to wait, lol. But this caught my interest and I just couldn't wait to start reading it. I hope the next chapter is soon. *bounces*
Oh and Jared was totally the guy telling Jensen to close his eyes when he was a kid, the guy with the changing eye colour. :D
Small word of advice, hope you don't take offense cause it's not meant, but you might want to watch your tenses. Soemtimes you're writing in the present tense and then you change to the past tense, it can be a little confusing. But anyway, the story it awesome, can't wait for more. :D

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-02 12:56 pm (UTC)(link)
hey!
to be honest, I hate WIP's too, I ALWAYS read a story when it's finished... because WIP's.. idk...then I get really into the story and then the author stops writing it.. grrr.. :)
so.. I know how hard it had to be for you to decide and read this... I totally get it and that's why I feel really really happy right now that you gave this a read even if it's just the 1st chapter :) thank you!

mhm... *gives you a cookie* :)))

omg, no offense, don't be silly! I love every comment and every criticism I can get... and thank you for telling me about the tenses... it's like: English is NOT my 1st language, hell it's not even my 2nd, and tenses give me a headache, and in the chapter I had to go back in time to tell what happened like years ago and then stay in this time to tell what's going on now and I confused myself a little too :) I'll try my very best to fix tenses in next chapters, thank you so much for telling me this! :)

I'll update soon! :)

S.

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[identity profile] cammie-bluesky.livejournal.com 2011-03-02 03:40 pm (UTC)(link)
This looks really really good. Can't wait to read more. :)

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-02 03:48 pm (UTC)(link)
THANK YOU! :)))
I'll post more soon, I promise :)

S.

[identity profile] spn-j2fan.livejournal.com 2011-03-03 03:20 am (UTC)(link)
I love the start of this story. It is absolutely fabulous! So much tension and fear building up. Poor mama!

And Jared took care of poor, young, lost Jensen, didn't he? Now I'm hoping he's waiting for his reward.

I can't wait for more! :)

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-03 03:41 pm (UTC)(link)
hey! :)

thank you! :) *squee* I'm sooo happy that you and everyone else liked this chapter so much, because it's kinda a boring chapter, OR is everyone telling lies to me!? LOL :))))

yup.. Jared hmmm, well 'took care of Jensen' yeah... in a way he did ... well, you'll see in chapter 3, what happened! *grins*

thank you so much for reading! more will be up on Saturday :)

THANK YOU! :)))

S.

[identity profile] zazreil.livejournal.com 2011-03-03 09:46 am (UTC)(link)
Jared:He can't remember much about that day, only flashes of brown-blue-green-yellow-orange eyes, brown hair and a voice telling him to just close his eyes. He did… he didn't want too but the voice was as soft as a lullaby and his eyes closed without him even doing anything.

And I would rather have another chapter please and that is saying a lot because I normally avoid RPS like the plague

[identity profile] soncnica.livejournal.com 2011-03-03 03:44 pm (UTC)(link)
*gives you a cookie* :))) they're chocolate :) :)

you don't like RPS?! *bites lip* are you sure you wanna read this story!? umm, did you read the warnings and everything!? and you still want another chapter!? *beams* thank you! :)
I'll update on Saturday and then you can decide if you wanna read more or not, yes!? :)

THANK YOU!

S.

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